Dude, the Stephen King school of writing where you start with a very long-winded intro is not conducive to motherless confessions.
Please edit down and get to the good stuff. In fact, you need to get to the good stuff within like 2-3 paragraphs, and in your first entry, or folks are gonna bail.
We're not here for soft-core, fifty shades of grey bullshit. We're here to hear about you banging some chick in the worst possible way.
Go home, revise your outline, edit the paper, and submit it again for us to grade.
